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307 to 205 words.  Well done.

The year is 2050. My friends and I in U.S.A made a clone machine. It was me, my name is Robin, James and Alex. After twenty three tries it worked! We had been using different animals but this time we used a gorilla and the machine worked. Our test subject name was Jimbo. We could upgrade the machine to get clone humans, but first we need to test this clone. This could make clones that could help people! I hope there’s nothing wrong with him. We call him Mech Clongor 23. We are letting Mech Clongor 23 copy Jimbos movements and feelings.

He is making improvements. I’m excited and I can’t sleep. My red hair is almost covering my eyes and I’m trying to blow it away. I’ll cut it tomorrow. At last I go to sleep. I wake up and put on my clothes. I go down to eat my breakfast. Then I go outside to my car and drive to the barber.

“Ah, it feels good now when I got my hair cut.” I look at my watch to see I was late to my job. I hurry to the car and drives over the speed limit. I can’t miss Mech Clongors improvements!

 

The year is 2050. A group of scientists and me in U.S.A has made a new machine. A clone machine. It was me, my name is Robin, my friends James the British man and Alex the Australian man. We had been working on it for five years and at last we did it. We did it! After twenty three tries we finally did it! We had been using different animals as rabbits, dogs, cats ect, but this time we used a gorilla and the machine worked. Our test subject name was Jimbo the gorilla. This was a big step for humanity! We could upgrade the machine a little and we could get clone humans, but first we need to test this clone. It’s a mechanical wonder! This could make clones that could help people in their home with dishes, food and much, much more! I just hope there’s nothing wrong with him. We call him Mech Clongor 23 for short of experience 23 mechanical clone gorilla. We are letting Mech Clongor 23 copy Jimbos movements and feelings.

He is making big improvements. He’ll maybe be even more successful tomorrow.   I’m so excited and I can’t sleep. My red hair is almost covering my eyes and I’m trying to blow it away. Oh well, I’ll have to cut it tomorrow. At last I go to sleep. I wake up and put on my clothes. I go down to eat my breakfast. Mmm! Bacons and eggs are my favorite. Then I go outside to my car and drive to the barber.

“Ah, it feels so good now when I got my hair cut.” I look at my watch to see I was getting late to my job. I hurry to the car and drives a little over the speed limit. I can’t miss a moment of Mech Clongors improvements.