Thursday, 7 November 2013

M O B, edited much more than she had to.

Wanka’s Adventure
                                                                             Fantasy/Adventure
            “Wanka, wake up!” Wanka jumped out of her bed. “Urgh, another exciting day starting”, Wanka muttered sarcastingly. She washed her face with cold, freezing water and changed into her casual clothes. She made her way downstairs, and slumped on her usual chair. “Good morning honey” her grandma, Amanda said smiling. “Yeah yeah good morning” Wanka felt like her eyelids weighed a ton. She slowly fell asleep…But suddenly, Amanda hit her head with a fry pan. “Ouch! Why did you do that?” Wanka grunted. “Wanka Brooks eat your breakfast” Wanka finally started eating her breakfast but staring straight at Amanda. 
            Later that afternoon, Wanka went to a flower shop to buy flowers for her grandma. It was Amanda’s 60th birthday, so she was planning to buy 60 roses for her. But Wanka was going to be 16, so she added 16 roses. There were 100 beautiful roses in the entrance and she bought 60 roses from them. Wanka also bought a big colorful vase. She was really excited to see Amanda’s face when she gives her present to her. Wanka went home running, but then suddenly, a man in black suit came towards her and smothered her with a handkerchief soaked in ether and Wanka fell asleep… When she woke up, she found herself in her own house. She looked around, but no one was around her. There was a note on the table, but someone was missing. It was Amanda. She dropped the vase with the roses in it and the glass clattered all over the floor.
            On the note, a simple map was drawn. There was a picture of a tree, a picture of an ocean, and a picture of a mountain. On the top right side of the map, there was a big X. She knew right away that she needed to save her grandma from whoever or whatever had taken her. She jumped out of the house and started heading towards the forest. But then suddenly, everything went black. First she saw a big forest with big giant trees and animals noises booming. Next, she a big ocean with huge waves and thunder storms stroking down. Then she was on top of a humongous mountain with blizzard around her. Finally, she saw a dark silent cave with her grandma in mouth duct taped. She shook her head and she was back to normal. Wanka put the map in her pocket and made her way into the forest.
            The forest was big and sticky, but she didn’t care. Well, only a little bit. She went walked straight not knowing where she was going. Wanka shivered and thought of the worst possible situation that might happen. Like not able to find Amanda and getting lost. Suddenly, she just couldn’t hold it, and burst into tears. “Amanda…” Wanka felt terrible and felt like going back. But of course, she couldn’t leave Amanda. So she chose to go find Amanda again, this time for real. “BUZZZZZ” she heard noises from behind her. When she turned around, millions of bugs came straight towards her. She ran as FAST as she could straight forward. Then, she saw the way out. She dashed towards it and reached out side. The millions of bugs went back into the forest, like nothing had happened. Wanka now headed to the ocean.

            After she walked about a kilometer or so, she saw a big wide ocean. The color of the ocean was beautiful, even though there were strong waves. Wanka saw a long bridge ahead of her, and saw a humongous mountain across it. She knew right away that she needed to cross the bridge to save her grandma. So Wanka started crossing the bridge, but it was really long. She thought it would take forever to cross the bridge. Eight minutes had past crossing the bridge, but she wasn’t even half way across. Suddenly, she heard a CRACK in the sky. Wanka started running. “CRACK”. Another thunder clap. The rain became harder too. Then, the lighting hit the end of the bridge and the bridge slowly started to go. Now Wanka was running full speed, and she made it, but she started heading to the mountain right away.
            Up Wanka looked, and the mountain looked even bigger. She was really worried if she could really go up that high, but then she saw a gondola next to her. She got in it right away, and headed all the way up the mountain with it. It took about thirty minutes to go all the way up, and then strong freezing wind pushed her from the back and she slipped forwards. She couldn’t stop. Then…she fell down from the mountain.


            She fell faster and faster, and the ground was getting close to her. She closed her eyes. But then, she stopped about a centimeter before landing. She slowly landed on the ground. She couldn’t believe it. Wanka stood up and didn’t say a word. But then next to her, she saw a dark cave, and knew right away that her grandma was inside, so rushed inside. First she couldn’t see a thing, but then, she saw a flare far ahead. Running, she reached the end of the cave, and stood there speechless. There was a chair but no one was sitting in it.

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